I followed your other thread. So THIS is the job that doesn't pay well and won't let you take on outside work? Darn.
I just looked over this thread and resumes 1 and 2. V2 ("For MMM") has typos still, and they are odd ones.
"forecasting clients need
s’ based on" - There should not be an apostrophe.
"Primary day-to-day" - You have two spaces in here.
I guess I'm not seeing what qualifies you to work in finance. I see degrees in history and leadership, lots of hockey coaching, a "financial analyst" contractor role that appears to be more about budgeting than anything complex, insurance licenses, and your most recent stint selling insurance. Insurance is not finance.
Did you take finance courses in college? Do you have any licenses for work in finance? Are you self-taught? You must say what qualifies you to work in finance and will make you at least as employable in that area as someone with an actual degree. You are competing with all the graduates who majored in finance.
If you want a job in finance, your coaching in ice hockey (while pretty cool!) is not going to be a big asset. That needs way less space on your resume.
For your
LinkedIn profile, some things that may help:
- Your LinkedIn profile must be as good as your resume. Anything that others can see on Facebook, LinkedIn, and the rest of the internet should not detract from your image. Employers will search your name on the internet. My most recent employer had another employee look up the Facebook and LinkedIn profiles of potential hires to see if they posted dumb stuff online (underage drinking, racist rants, etc.) that we wouldn't want connected to us.
- New headshot with better lighting. You need less shadow on your face and more of a smile. Headshots should make you look friendly and approachable. It doesn't have to be taken professionally, but keep dressed professionally for it (as you are). You might consider posting the same pic on your personal Facebook profile in place of the current one where you are falling asleep. (Yes, I Facebook-stalked you. Potential employers will do the same.) Your NYL profile is not going to keep people from looking at your personal one, and your NYL profile also needs a smile in the headshot.
- The phrase "complicated and complex problems" is redundant. Your summary looks like buzzwords without meaning. How does "linear" fit?
- Why is NY Life's disclaimer in your role description? Nothing in your description requires a disclaimer. Also, instead of "I am not licensed in all jurisdictions," try "I am licensed in CT, NY, and XX." (Whichever areas apply, of course.)
- USE LinkedIn's skills section. Here is where you can put all the Excel functions you use, all the MS Office programs you know, and any other programs. Why is there an ellipsis after "Wealth Preservation"? If finance people say you know your finance stuff, get them to endorse you on LinkedIn. The only semi-financial thing for which you have endorsements is "Analysis," which unfortunately may not be the skill title you needed (as it could refer to database analysis, weather patterns analysis, hockey strategy analysis, etc.). Look at keywords in the jobs you want, and see if you have those skills. If so, add them to the list.
- See if you can get anyone with a FINANCE background to give you a LinkedIn recommendation as to your FINANCE capabilities, then copy that onto your resume. I notice you have endorsements from an engineer which is nice, but not as authoritative.